HMD MEME part I - Constructive Criticism

[soul_mods]

HMD Meme
Constructive Criticism


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Please post your character name, fandom and their journal name!

<b>Character Name:</b> <b>Fandom:</b> <b>Journal:</b>

Comments

[soul_mods]

[verdant-lotus.livejournal.com]

I wanted to preface this by mentioning exactly how smoothly this game is run, and that I think you guys are doing a fantastic job.

One thing I have noticed though is a lot of lag on updating things, specifically reserves. Some characters were in the game for weeks before the reserves were updated to reflect that they'd been accepted, where other reserves were left up on the page 2+ weeks after they expired. There are also a fair amount of links in the files on the soul_mods journal that lead to posts that players are unauthorized to view. It makes it difficult to keep track of things.

[seizeyoursouls.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Prussia
Fandom: Axis Powers Hetalia
Journal: seizeyoursouls

Character Name: Nanako Dojima
Fandom: Persona 4
Journal: junesplz

Character Name: Shalnark
Fandom: Hunter x Hunter
Journal: shalnark

Character Name: Patti Thompson (NPC)
Fandom: Soul Eater
Journal: thebiggergun

Character Name: Azusa Yumi (NPC)
Fandom: Soul Eater
Journal: snipingyourfail

Character Name: Angela (NPC)
Fandom: Soul Eater
Journal: onewitchsoul

I'm not including Medusa since her appearance isn't required just yet thus has been inactive. However, I'll take advice if you have any!

[singstheprayer.livejournal.com]

Character Name:Lacus Clyne
Fandom: Mobile Suit Gundam Seed
Journal: singstheprayer

Character Name: Hiruko
Fandom: Nightmare Inspector
Journal: yumekui_kenbun

Character Name: Demon Lord Raenef the Vth
Fandom: Demon Diary
Journal: mock_me_vermin

[socialbutterfly]

Character Name: Minato Arisato
Fandom: Persona 3
Journal: arisatominato

[croix-souillees.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Neku Sakuraba
Fandom: The World Ends With You
Journal: gotphones

Character Name: Namine
Fandom: Kingdom Hearts
Journal: fromthewaves

Character Name: Lightning Farron
Fandom: Final Fantasy XIII
Journal: lightingtruth

Character Name: Kaworu Nagisa
Fandom: Neon Genesis Evangelion: Gakuen Datenroku
Journal: forgetspajamas

[antiakuma.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Heine Rammsteiner
Fandom: DOGS:Bullets & Carnage
Journal: bulletcarnage

Character Name: Allen Walker
Fandom: D.Gray-man
Journal: antiakuma

[ih8spiders]

Character Name: Kurapika
Fandom: Hunter x Hunter
Journal: ih8spiders

Also uuh I was the one who handled Azusa Yumi in the last intro log. I dived into it without any canon review whatsoever so I was kind of iffy with her. ;;; Depending on how things go, I might end up taking over for her entirely, so it'd be great if I could get feedback for her? If you threaded with her there and want to tell me anything, that is. Even if it's "you suck go read the manga first". :'Db The actual HMD comment for Azusa is with Celi here. Thank you!

Hatafutte~ Hatafutte~ Hatafutte PAREDO!

[miarrendo.livejournal.com]

Character Name: England (Arthur Kirkland)
Fandom: Hetalia
Journal: notexcalibur

Character Name: North Italy (Feliciano Vargas)
Fandom: Hetalia
Journal: miarrendo

Character Name: Shaymin
Fandom: Pokémon
Journal: flowercarrying

Character Name: Blair (NPC)
Fandom: Soul Eater
Journal: blackmagicpussy

[kandescence]

Character Name: Kanda Yuu
Fandom: D. Gray-man
Journal: kandescence

Character Name: Badou Nails
Fandom: DOGS
Journal: smokeeasy

Stiiiill technically on hiatus for fail net. Apologies again for all the slow that (and various RL woes) has made for this month. But the net issue, at least, should be resolved within the next few days. /crosses fingers

[redeemed-polly.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Iago
Fandom: Aladdin
Journal: redeemed_polly

[holy-prankster.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Sephiroth
Fandom: Final Fantasy VII
Journal: pure_lineage

Character Name: Shibuya Yuuri
Fandom: Kyou Kara Maou
Journal: a_r0yal_flush

Character Name: Sohki
Fandom: Genju no Seiza
Journal: holy_prankster

Character Name: Tassadar
Fandom: Starcraft
Journal: aiursfavoredson

[wishingforvilla.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Rise Kujikawa
Fandom: Persona 4
Journal: forthecamera

Character Name: Winry Rockbell
Fandom: Fullmetal Alchemist
Journal: endthiscycle

Character Name: Fa Mulan (Ping)
Fandom: Disney's Mulan
Journal: thethirdhare

Character Name: Liz Thompson (NPC)
Fandom: Soul Eater
Journal: thesmallergun

Character Name: Eruka Frog (NPC)
Fandom: Soul Eater
Journal: thespazzyfrog

[verdant-lotus.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Rock Lee
Fandom: Naruto
Journal: verdant_lotus

[huntsprincesses.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Ludwig
Fandom: Ludwig Kakumei
Journal: huntsprincesses

[pianoman-soul.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Soul
Fandom: Soul Eater (NPC)
Journal: pianoman_soul

Character Name: Excalibro
Fandom: Soul Eater (NPC)
Journal: excali_fornia

[rabukidastrophe.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Kida Masaomi
Fandom: Durarara!!
Journal: rabukidastrophe

[killswithkisses.livejournal.com]

I really have to applaud how well Kida is played. His voice is quite strong and I enjoy the engrish. :) I need to catch up on a few episodes but I think you have his voice.

[littlestcommie.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Cuba
Fandom: Axis Powers Hetalia
Journal: littlestcommie

Character Name: George Washington
Fandom: John Adams
Journal: firstinall

Character Name: Adrian Monk
Fandom: Monk
Journal: cursedwithagift

Yes, I've been on hiatus and am creeping back from it slowly. Still, hit me if you've got anything! :D

[bodyline.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Usagi Tsukino
Fandom: Sailor Moon (manga)
Journal: mooncalice

Character Name: Lenalee Lee
Fandom: D. Gray-man
Journal: awesomeboots

Character Name: Günter von Kleist
Fandom: Kyou Kara Maou
Journal: heikaaaa

[ih8spiders]

... Please remember to tag your comments. >: You always forget to do that.

[histrionicflair.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Franziska von Karma
Fandom: Ace Attorney
Journal: histrionicflair

[ranty-rie.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Superbi Squalo
Fandom: Katekyo Hitman Reborn
Journal: requiem_no_ame

Character Name: Hades
Fandom: Disney's Hercules
Journal: furnace_head

Character Name: Izaya Orihara
Fandom: DRRR!!
Journal: loves_humanity

Character Name: Mitsukuni Haninozuka
Fandom: Ouran High School Host Club
Journal: low_sugar_bunny

Character Name: Constance Hardbroom
Fandom: The Worst Witch
Journal: needs_no_wand

[starkissed.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Sakura Kinomoto
Fandom: Cardcaptor Sakura
Journal: rosy_wings

Character Name: Arashi Kishuu
Fandom: X/1999
Journal: storm_of_ise

Character Name: Oruha
Fandom: Clover
Journal: marked_songbird

I know I've been spotty with tagging back a lot, but I'm trying to kick that problem with mixed results. /o\

Also, I'd really love for concrit, especially on Sakura. I feel like I've been playing her in a way that comes out as flat lately, so I'd appreciate any and all comments or advice.

[thewarisover.livejournal.com]

You've got Arashi's elegance down, along with her strength. I think what I need to see more of, though, are the secretly pleasant or flaily sides of her personality. She seems a little too flat, whereas her original in the actual series is more multi-dimensional.

[recitings]

Character Name: Genesis Rhapsodos
Fandom: Final Fantasy VII
Journal: redpeacock

[vctryatthedisco.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Junpei Iori
Fandom: Persona 3
Journal: vctryatthedisco

[thebestandwurst]

Character Name: Germany
Fandom: Hetalia
Journal: thebestandwurst

Character Name: Kuroro Lucifer
Fandom: Hunter x Hunter
Journal: alphaspider

Character Name: John Watson
Fandom: Sherlock Holmes
Journal: stalwartcane

Character Name: Spirit Albarn aka Deathscythe
Fandom: Soul Eater (NPC)
Journal: daddyscythe

Character Name: Mifune
Fandom: Soul Eater (NPC)
Journal: ninetyninesouls


Sorry my activity has been really suffering lately. RL has been whacked since June started.

[justtubeit.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Raidou Kuzunoha
Fandom: Devil Summoner
Journal: justtubeit

Character Name: Laura Kinney
Fandom: Marvel Comics
Journal: kidkittyclaws

Character Name: Rokudo Mukuro
Fandom: Katekyo Hitman Reborn!
Journal: karmafree

Character Name: Roy Mustang
Fandom: Full Metal Alchemist (Season 1)
Journal: thewarisover

Character Name: Axel
Fandom: Kingdom Hearts
Journal: pyroporcupine

[antiakuma.livejournal.com]

While on the whole I do think your voices for Roy and Axel (the only two I know the canons for) are good, I feel that I want to bring a couple of things to you generally.

First, while you are clearly willing to tag back forever, and that's very awesome, I have found on several occasions even when you bring your characters to mine I am the one who is doing a lot of work to find things to keep the threads going. I have noticed a trend in which after a few opening comments your characters start to give responses that are conversation enders, not conversation maintainers or organic CR builders. I have also found that when I do spend time thinking up topics for my character/s to bring up to continue the thread with yours that I am then met with another conversation ender in response. This gives off the impression to me--even if this isn't the case--that you want CR not through mutual work and development, but instead to be brought to you by the other player putting in the work in your stead. It’s a real shame because I genuinely do enjoy what we have been doing with Allen and Roy especially, but even those threads have sometimes left me feeling very drained from needing to keep the thread afloat.

Secondly, I think you may need to double-check you IC knowledge in relation to your OOC knowledge. I am seeing a few places that I think there is some bleeding between the lines going on (i.e, Roy’s notes seem to know more about some characters than he realistically should know and Mukuro, for example, I think has hones in on ‘secret creeper types’ with little to no reason for him to suspect them first.)

Perhaps related to this, one issue that I’ve noticed crop up several times is that your characters’ intelligence seems to get hand-waved in game rather than appearing through their interactions; their smartness really needs to not be hand-waved otherwise you may risk starting to come across as godmod-y, which I know is not your intention at all XD;;