HMD Meme Part I - Constructive Criticism

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HMD Meme
Constructive Criticism


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[soul_mods]

/inappropriate icon time

[maplezen.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Matthew Williams (Canada)
Fandom: Axis Powers: Hetalia
Journal: maplezen

Always looking for ways to be awesomer!

Character Name: Ling Yao
Fandom: Fullmetal Alchemist
Journal: for_xing

Thoughts on his voice guys. Sometimes I feel a little derp derp over it.

Character Name: Jaime Reyes (Blue Beetle)
Fandom: DC Comics
Journal: beetlecave

HE'S OBSCURE BUT IF YOU KNOW HIM ANY COMMENTS AT ALL WOULD ROCK. Its my first time playing him after all.

Character Name: Sid Barret (NPC)
Fandom: Soul Eater
Journal: zombie_teacher

HIT ME LIKE THE MAN I ONCE WAS. I know I need to get him trolling DEMISE more but ANY OTHER THOUGHTS WOULD BE WONDERFUL.

Re: /inappropriate icon time

[killswithkisses.livejournal.com]

I know I haven't been around too much but I absolutely love your Matt. I think the only thing I can really suggest is for more interactions between them? I kinda miss some of Matty's snarky comments. Then again, currently its a bad time for them.

I SHOULD REALLY READ JAIME'S POSTS SO I CAN HELP. *FAIL*

[forthecamera.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Rise Kujikawa
Fandom: Persona 4
Journal: forthecamera

Character Name: Winry Rockbell
Fandom: Fullmetal Alchemist
Journal: endthiscycle

Character Name: Fa Mulan (Ping)
Fandom: Disney's Mulan
Journal: thethirdhare

Character Name: Desiree "DiDi" Chastel
Fandom: Menage a 3
Journal: notthebutch

Character Name: Matilda Wormwood
Fandom: Matilda by Roald Dahl
Journal: nailsandglass


NPCS


Character Name: Elizabeth "Liz" Thompson
Fandom: Soul Eater
Journal: thesmallergun

[notexcalibur.livejournal.com]

I-I also would suggest looking over your tags before posting them, as I told Moony. I see quite a few grammatical errors from time to time. And while it's not a big issue, I just think it's something you could work on towards becoming a better player.

[seizeyoursouls.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Gilbert Weillschmidt (Prussia)
Fandom: Axis Powers Hetalia
Journal: seizeyoursouls

His voice is going up and down at the moment! I am trying to stabilize him again.

Character Name: Ness
Fandom: Earthbound/Mother 2
Journal: psisteakomega

My weakest muse! I am working on trying to be more active now that the event is over.

Character Name: Nanako Dojima
Fandom: Persona 4
Journal: junesplz

I am unsure of this one... there's a balance between being too childish and too mature that I'm working on. Advice is cool.

Character Name: Patti Thompson
Fandom: Soul Eater
Journal: thebiggergun

She's slowly making her way in again! After the party, she'll show up even more. :D

[notexcalibur.livejournal.com]

I would like to see more Ness. I think you're worrying too much about keeping him... I don't know. He comes off as very stiff, and kind of bland. Try making him more natural. He's a kid from the 90s, not 50s. XD He doesn't have to be wholesomely good.

[leavejapanalone]

Character Name: Mei | Taiwan
Fandom: Axis Power Hetalia
Journal: leavejapanalone

Character Name: Romano Vargas | South Italy
Fandom: Axis Power Hetalia
Journal: adudeindistress

Tell me what I am doing wrong. Lately, I've been really struggling with Romano but I don't want to drop him just yet. If you guys have any concrit on the dude and/or Taiwan too, let me know!

[notexcalibur.livejournal.com]

Romano is too... harsh. I think it's okay for some times, but the fact that he is really just verbally abusing everyone is a big turn-off. You've got to try and find a balance with him.

[socials]

Character Name: Souji Seta
Fandom: Persona 4
Journal: setasouji

Character Name: Antonio Fernandez Carriedo (Spain)
Fandom: Axis Powers Hetalia
Journal: pedomato

Character Name: Professor Franken Stein
Fandom: Soul Eater
Journal: anatomizations

[junesplz.livejournal.com]

For both of us, I think we need to get more interaction between these two.

[notexcalibur.livejournal.com]

Character Name: England / Arthur Kirkland
Fandom: Axis Powers: Hetalia
Journal: notexcalibur

Character Name: North Italy / Feliciano Vargas
Fandom: Axis Powers: Hetalia
Journal: miarrendo

I AM TRYING TO GET ITALY OUT MORE. DO YOU APPROVE OF WHAT YOU SEE?

[junesplz.livejournal.com]

Oh man. I think you're getting Italy near perfect now LOL. Some of his scenes make me laugh so hard. I think there are times where he gets a little too serious or tough though I can't recall the exact parts. However, I really do like what you're doing with Italy now. ♥

I would say England has been more emotional lately, but WHEN I CONSIDER WHAT ALL HAS HAPPENED, I don't know if I can blame him, rofl. I do miss his and Prussia's banter. I like England banter. Needs more. And more england/children threads. Never can have enough.

[socialbutterfly]

Character Name: Minato Arisato
Fandom: Persona 3
Journal: arisatominato

This silent protagonist thing is hard. Thoughts?

[pkmn-hero.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Ash Ketchum
Fandom: Pocket Monster Diamond Pearl
Journal: pkmn_hero

Character Name: Elizaveta Hedevary (Hungary)
Fandom: Axis Powers Hetalia
Journal: magyar_maiden

PLEASE ANYTHING WITH HER! I FEEL SO SHAKEY WITH HER!!!

Character Name: Sherlock Holmes
Fandom: Sherlock Holmes by Sir Arthur Conan Doyle
Journal: only7percent

Character Name: Mushu!
Fandom: Disney's Mulan
Journal: travel_sized4u

[notexcalibur.livejournal.com]

I noticed in our recent conversation with Hungary and England that she... kind of kept going around in circles? Would say something and then say an entirely different thing later. So I can tell you are struggling. I'm not sure what kind of advice to offer you. Play down the crazy. Not all the time, but I've just seen versions of her where she is like this MEGA BITCH. You do not do that, so I'm happy.

I think, in general, you need to slow down and think about what you write before pressing the send key. I know it's exciting to tag quickly, and I think most of us do. But it can make all the difference if you calm down and think about what you're writing before actually jumping in. :3

[ih8spiders]

Character Name: Kurapika
Fandom: Hunter x Hunter
Journal: ih8spiders

My main issue for him at the moment would be the effects of the massive disparity between RL time and in-game time. +_+ I actually feel quite comfortable playing him, but I worry that he sounds too comfortable or familiar, especially with certain characters.

[brosukee.livejournal.com]

certain characters...........

OKAY since I feel like most people don't know HxH fandom, I'll attempt... something.

I'm going to be honest and say that the disparity isn't so bad. I know it seems pretty WHOA THAT WAS FAST but I think it works with Kurapika's character. He's the type to adapt pretty easily to new situations, and do the best he can, even when he doesn't like the people he's working for. (For example, the part where he's play bodyguard. He doesn't want to work for someone who would try to buy Kuruta eyes, but he adapts and does a damn good job.) I think for now, he's seeing this like a mission. He has to work with what he's been given, and he's been given... Kuroro. And that's better than nothing at all.

I think, perhaps, you could play with the idea that they're not going home is really just setting in for him. This is no longer just a mission, but a way of life. That might push him back from his acceptance and throw a wrench into his Relationship with Kuroro: since they're not going to be going home and returning to their regular lifestyles, he now has to completely reassess both Kuroro and the situation as a whole. Maybe that would help you feel more comfortable with the RL vs. IG time issue.

IDK just throwing out ideas. Hope that helps, even just a tiny bit. ;;;

[ornithophobia.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Scarecrow
Fandom: DCU
Journal: ornithophobia

[forthecamera.livejournal.com]

Admittedly I've never really read any of he comics, or watched the movies--I did see the one he was in but I barely remember it. So I can't really say anything in terms of ICness but you certainly do make him interesting and I definitely look forward to your plotting.

Speaking of which! I know you asked about it in one of the mod posts but I don't know if any of us have gotten to you yet? If you want to IM me, or me to ping you about that I'd be happy to.

[fridgeburnt.livejournal.com]

Character Name: XANXUS
Fandom: katekyo hitman reborn
Journal: fridgeburnt


Character Name: KAMUI
Fandom: x/1999 [manga]
Journal: popupshadow


i would like some on kamui, esp. i am really really unsure of how i play him sometimes /sob;;. however, if you got something on xanxus too, feel free to drop a line!

[firebrands.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Zenjirou Kasai
Fandom: Majin Tantei Nougami Neuro
Journal: firebrands

[crackingcases.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Naoto Shirogane
Fandom: Persona 4
Journal: crackingcases

Character Name: Heather Mason
Fandom: Silent Hill 3
Journal: not_her_path

Character Name: Vash Zwingli (Switzerland)
Fandom: Axis Powers Hetalia
Journal: gun_politics

Character Name: Severus Snape
Fandom: Harry Potter
Journal: severusly_evil

Character Name: Tomoyo Daidouji
Fandom: Cardcaptor Sakura
Journal: daidouji_heir

[suchselfishness]

Character Name: Rhode Kamelot
Fandom: D. Gray-man
Journal: suchselfishness

I kind of need to work on a few things with her, but uh. Let me know if you see something specific/blatant, I guess? I feel like I'm not doing as well with her as I should/could be, and I'm always trying to find ways to improve.

[50starhero.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Alfred F. Jones / America
Fandom: Axis Powers Hetalia
Journal: 50starhero


Lately I feel like I haven't been making America... positive enough. That "yes-we-can" attitude of his isn't coming through. What do you guys think? Also also help me build a better America.

[maplezen.livejournal.com]

/SITS DOWN AND STARES AT.

ksjdal i mean. I think you might be a bit right with the positiveness! Understandably, a lot of things have been happening lately that have been well, rather gloomy. But! In general sometimes he comes off a little more negative or ah just kind of meaner than maybe he should? lksdjfl am I making any sense i really need to sleep.

[smokersona.livejournal.com]

i'm sneaking in from hiatus for this

Character Name: Ryotaro Dojima
Fandom: Persona 4
Journal: smokersona

Character Name: Takeshi Yamamoto
Fandom: Katekyo Hitman Reborn
Journal: mafiaballs

Character Name: Kurogane
Fandom: Tsubasa Reservoir Chronicle
Journal: bigpuppy

[popcandy.livejournal.com]

Would love to see more of your characters, bb! I think Dojima is A+ but I would love to see Yamapii spread out outside of Reborn cast. If you have, ignore me! I don't see all threads so it could be just me. I might just not be seeing it!

I definitely want to see more kuropapa though. >:M You can't escape there.

[killswithkisses.livejournal.com]

Character Name:Yoko Ritona
Fandom:Tengen Toppa Gurren Lagaan
Journal:killswithkisses

|D;; I will definitely be trying to become more active again.

[(Anonymous)]

Sooo, this isn't really a huge big thing but I figure anything can help right?

Your grammar and I guess word usage (idk what to call it) would really benefit from a going-over before you post. It seems to be something that happens pretty frequently and it takes away a little from what Yoko's saying.

[ranty-rie.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Superbi Squalo
Fandom: Katekyo Hitman Reborn!
Journal: requiem_no_ame

Character Name: Hades
Fandom: Disney's Hercules
Journal: furnace_head

[highestpriority.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Aegis
Fandom: Persona 3
Journal: highestpriority

Kyaaa I'm definitely struggling already; I'm hoping this will ease up a bit after settling in, but any concerns/comments/advice are very very welcomed!

[socialbutterfly]

The best bit of critique that I can give you, having played with your Aegis before in other places and being privvy to your self-effacing quality concerns, is to stop worrying so much all the time. Bite the bullet and dive into the deep end; you'll find the experience more than rewarding for it, :).

[kandescence]

Character Name: Kanda Yuu
Fandom: D. Gray-man
Journal: kandescence

Character Name: Badou Nails
Fandom: DOGS
Journal: smokeeasy

[needling]

Character Name: Kanji Tatsumi
Fandom: Persona 4
Journal: specialcracker

[fanoflaughter.livejournal.com]

Character Name: Yukiko Amagi
Fandom: Persona 4
Journal: fanoflaughter

Character Name: Yukito Tsukishiro
Fandom: Cardcaptor Sakura
Journal: feedthebunny

I just intro'd him, I know, but if there's anything you think of right off the bat, now would be the perfect time to tell me, as I find my footing with him.

[brosukee.livejournal.com]

More Yukiko! >:O /infinitely helpful

[queensharbour.livejournal.com]

Character Name: James/Zhi Ming (Hong Kong)
Fandom: Axis Powers Hetalia
Journal: queensharbour

I welcome crit, since I'm still trying to find the balance between quiet and boring, as well as teetering between polite and too nice for HK's personality. He doesn't have a lot of canon to go on, but please feel free to let me know if you think I'm on the wrong track or off in any way.

[blue_rampion]

Character Name: Aladdin
Fandom: Aladdin
Journal: doyoutrustme

Character Name: Alex Louis Armstrong
Fandom: Fullmetal Alchemist
Journal: manofsparkle

Character Name: Merlin
Fandom: Merlin
Journal: onesidedcoin

Character Name: Miranda Lotto
Fandom: D.Gray-man
Journal: clock_chime

Okay...I haven't actually brought Merlin into the game yet. But uh, I figured I'd put him up here anyway! (...maybe people could give preventative crit or something? XD)

BUT! I would especially love to hear any crit people have on Aladdin in particular. For all that technically he's been in the game a while, he still feels like a very new muse to me and I think I've yet to get a good solid handle on him. So, thoughts appreciated.

[kandescence]

Pls do intro Merlin soon. Not just cause I'm being all selfish and wanting to see him in game though that's totally part of it, but just that now that time is unstuck again, it seems bad form to kind of hold him in your pocket without actually playing him.

For Armstrong, I'd sometimes like to see a little more of his (clothed) srs bzns side--the Armstrong who "tells" Mustang about what really happened when Hughes died by simply standing at attention and saying "I cannot say," and who has this sort of wise stoicism that observes and understands quite a lot, even if he ultimately says very little. That definitely shouldn't be to the exclusion of the suddenly naked sparkle-times, but just a counterpoint to add to it, maybe?