Yes, the pattern that I learned followed your second example, yet in the past when I have submitted apps written like that they have been turned away for having too much history mixed into the personality (despite the fact that it was normally about a 1:1 ratio of traits to historical event with some events used more then once where relevant.

The way I understand thing it seems that you are working to change what is and isn't accepted, my biggest concern centers around what has been sent back for revision in the past becoming something deserving of outright rejection based of the simple difference in writing style.