After further contemplation I have come to understand where my primary worry at being rejected is. It comes from the fact that 2/3 of my apps have been sent back for revision on the personality with the basis of sounding too much like a history. The reason my section comes off sounding so much like a history is because I am holding true to how I was taught to write a subjective paper, and I feel that the personality is the most highly subjective part of any character. This method specifically works in the format of 'subjective idea followed by objective proof' and this pattern is meant to be repeated for ever subjective idea presented.

Even understanding a bit more of the expectations on how my personality section was to be written I still had to rewrite this section on my 3rd app due to the same issue. This is because after years of school teaching me that specific writing style with subjective topics I find it hard to see what I rewrite as being more effective or detailed then the original.

From what I am reading here is what you mean then I should be fine to write a personality section with this method and not have it rejected on the basis of 'sounding too much like a history', is this correct?